Overall, I thought you had a very solid paper. I did notice a formatting errors. This included italicizing the captions underneath the graphs. Also make sure that the running header is only on the first page and then a shorter header is included on the rest of the pages and this header is in all caps. I think you could add one more source to the introduction section. In the results section I think you could add a sentence at the end of each paragraph describing what the data is suggesting or implying. Finally in the discussion, I wold try and connect your findings to what you discussed in the introduction. I think that you could just add a few sentences at the end of the first paragraph and how what you found related to prior sleep research. Again, this was a very solid paper and I hope these suggestions help.
Overall, I thought you had a very solid paper. I did notice a formatting errors. This included italicizing the captions underneath the graphs. Also make sure that the running header is only on the first page and then a shorter header is included on the rest of the pages and this header is in all caps. I think you could add one more source to the introduction section. In the results section I think you could add a sentence at the end of each paragraph describing what the data is suggesting or implying. Finally in the discussion, I wold try and connect your findings to what you discussed in the introduction. I think that you could just add a few sentences at the end of the first paragraph and how what you found related to prior sleep research. Again, this was a very solid paper and I hope these suggestions help.
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